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Some people think competitive sport is important for a child’s education. Others think it has negative effects on children. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sport #child’s #education #effects #children
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 ,hand parents feel that
sports
 are
also
 important to their kids
as
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similar to good
education
. Whereas, competitive
sport
 places a vital role in
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on
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upbringing
toddlers
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of toddlers
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.
On the other
hand
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 people thinks practising
sport
 will not help to earn much. In
this
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both
the
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 views and
also
 my opinion on competitive
sport
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sports
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Firstly
, Where there is importance to mental
education
 equal importance should be given to physical learning as well,
sports
 play an important role in every individual to keep our physical
fit
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 and flexible,
in
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at
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 young
age
 we all have good stamina to manage all sorts of activities rather than old
age
.
Eventhough
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Even though
, we play multiple
sports
 in our schooling and college competition helps to keep us motivated and
focus
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, when it comes to competitive
sport
 adolescent will learn about rules, regulations, time management, willingness to accept
the
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defeat and learning from their faults.
However
, I endure that practising a
sport
 keeps our body and mind fresh and young.
Secondly
, Parents
also
thinks
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 that spending more time on play might spoil their younger
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education
 system where they cannot score good marks on the written exams.
Moreover
, not every
sports
 person can earn a good amount of money to run their daily life, we need to be too popular personality to be rich
orelse
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or else
 they have to struggle to earn for their basic needs on daily basis
hence
 most of the parents in our nation are not supporting any
sport
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 activities to their kids. In my opinion,
in
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at
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 young
age
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,age
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 we should practice any kind of game for sure, which helps our body and mind to keep healthy for years later. playing
a
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athletics
on
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at
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 young
age
 will carry our health well for long years.
Hence
, I am a strong advocate of competitive
sport
 is important for child
education
.
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