“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

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Productive citizens give lots of benefits to their country. To support
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for their citizens. There are two ways in which
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treatment
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I will explain why
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should be spent on
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provides more benefits.
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with, not all
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can be
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, but most of them can be cured. Cancer,
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, is known to be undetectable until it has grown.
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cell is a parasite that can be found in most parts of your body, but it is not dangerous until it is activated. To
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day, we do not have any knowledge of what
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it.
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, some
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are a result of an unexpected event.
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accident can make a person with a very healthy lifestyle
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, many
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believe that preventative measures are useless due to a lot of reasons.
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, some unhealthy habits are hard to quit. Even
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cigarette box has a picture of
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caused by smoking;
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keep on doing it anyway. Another example is the increase
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fast-food consumption despite the healthy diet campaign.
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, money spent on preventative measures
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not as targeted
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on
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will only be spent when
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are ill, while
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spent on
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may result in
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having the
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that were prevented anyway. In conclusion, despite the high cost of treating
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, I strongly believe that the money spent
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than for
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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