Some parents want their children to read only serious educational books at all times.They don't wantbtheir children tobread any entertainment books because they think it is a waste of time.Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?why?

There are parents who believe that
children
should spend time in educational
books
and they feel that reading entertainment
books
are waste of time. I strongly disagree with
this
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argument
arguement
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argument
that
wide
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range of reading is more helpful for the integrated development of
children
.
Purpose
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of reading
books
is to develop knowledge as well as to feel mentally relaxed.
First
of all, even though
children
gain additional knowledge about varieties of topics through educational
books
,limiting their reading to
this
particular area may result in
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fatigue and even aversion
towards
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reading. When they incorporate other
books
like story
books
,
novel
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, comics and poems, which will help them to relax.
Second
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reason is that through stories and other entertaining
books
, it is easy to plant different values and concepts in
children
.
For example
, to train a child in the virtue of charity
instead
of giving a book which
describe
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about
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what is charity if we give a book which
illusyrates
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illustrates
beautifully a story of a boy who
practice
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charity will be more beneficial. To conclude reading is a habit which should develop from childhood. When reading
become
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enjoyable and beneficial
children
may easily tune
to
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the habit of reading.
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