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people who ate at least five portions of fruit and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001-2008.

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The bar graph compares the proportion of humans who ate
fruite
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fruit
fruits
 and
vegetable
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at
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 least five portions in
UK
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the UK
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 in three critical categories between 2001 and 2008. Overall, it is clear that the
number
 of
female
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 was the most significant percentage , while children
was
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 the least amount. The
number
 of
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women
women's
womens
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women
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 started at 25
then
 it was
gradual
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 increase to reach a peak in 2006 , just 35 ,
afterward
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 it declined slightly to 30 in 2008 . In 2006 , the lowest
number
 was children , around 22 compared with almost 27 and 35 for mall and
female
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females
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 respectively . From 2001 to 2008 ,
situation
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 did not
witnessed
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 much change , so the highest and lowest
number
 was the same in both years ,
it
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 just increased sharply .
Further
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analyze
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, the children figure reached a low in
first
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 three years , at 13% . In 2006 , all categories reach a peak in it before
decreased
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 slowly in
last
 two years .
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