International travel is becoming cheaper and countries are opening their doors to more and more tourists. Do the advantage if increased tourists overweigh disadvantages?

An increasing number of tourists are choosing to travel
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other
countries
nowadays come from the expense that use in a trip
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lower than before. From my point of view,
these
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increasing number of
toutists
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tourists
offer
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both advantages and disadvantages. In the following paragraphs, both of these views will be
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discussed
disscussed
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discussed
in detail before the conclusion is reached. On the one hand, one of the advantages if the number of tourists
are
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increase,
countries
will gain more GDP that
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consumption in
countries
, and
tourisks
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tourists
will spend the money in
countries
.
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, Economic will be stronger, citizens have
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opportunity
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oppertunity
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opportunity
to have a job. It will be
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chance in many
business
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such
as
Hotel
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and
restaurant
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.
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, they have
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to exchange culture and religion. On the
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other
othe
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other
hand, not all of them is
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in
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culture.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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