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Younger employees have more skills, knowledge and more motivated than older employees. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your argument with your own experience.

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In
this
 modern era, younger
employees
 are preferred by many companies more than
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older ones. Many believe that younger
employees
 are more
skillfull
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skilful
skillfully
, more knowledgeable, and more motivated than their seniors. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I agree with
this
 view; supported by my own experience. One of the main reasons is younger
employees
are tend
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 to be more curious. Curiosity drives younger
employees
 to explore new information and drives them to think outside the box when they are faced with obstacles at work. When I was a marketing staff,
for example
, I proposed a strategy to use
tiktok
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TikTok
 as
marketing
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 platform, and it went viral throughout the country.
On the other hand
, the older
employees
 were unaware of
this
 platform because they were not active on social media. Clearly, younger
staffs
' curiosity makes them better than the older
staffs
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. The other reason is younger
employees
 are more adaptive. If there are new things introduced in a workplace, younger
staffs
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 take it better than the older
staffs
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.
For example
, one time there was a change from paper-based
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 to digital
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 in my office, and all the older
employees
 were having difficulties adapting to the change. Older
employees
 prefer to stick to the old ways and they are not open to improvements. In conclusion, many believe that younger
employees
 are better than older
employees
 in terms of skills, knowledge, and motivations. I believe
this
 is the case since younger
staffs
 have more curiosity and they easily adapt to improvements.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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