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Some people think history has nothing or little to tell us, but others think that studying the past history can help us better understand the present. discuss both views and give your opinion. give reason for your answer an include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Many
people
 argue that historical
events
 have noting or small parts that can be useful to us,
however
, others believe that learning from past
history
 can help us better understand the recent situation or future. I completely agree with
history
 can tell us much more things about past
events
 that could lead to a better stand-in the present
time
 and help future movements.
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 will
argues
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 why historical
event
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events
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 can bring better
situation
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 for the present
time
. Some
people
 may say that past historical event
events
 cannot tell us much information. Perhaps, they think that past
events
 have already gone and
people
 need to focus on the present
time
, so should be moving forward.
Also
, If they might think about past
events
, they could be getting
regret
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 or afraid judged by others which might lead to hard times.
However
, there is a lot of knowledge humans can gain from
history
.
People
 learning about their
history
 is entirely necessary for their life which could help avoid big risks or mistakes.
For example
, if we look at our personal lives, we could learn many things obtained from life experiences in our past
time
.
That is
 quite similar to a nation or society. Another example is that the Covid pandemic has been thought us many lessons about how to prevent widespread pandemics and how to tackle that epidemic around the world together.
Therefore
, it is essential for humans willing to learn and gain experience from the
last
time
. In conclusion, there are many different opinions about
history
 at the present
time
. I think, a minority of
people
 ignore past
history
 and the majority of
people
 believe that there is so much knowledge we could gain from our
history
.
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