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You recently attended a conference and would like to give a presentation to your colleagues about it. Write a letter to your manager and include: Write a letter The topic of the conference Why you want to present about it When it could be done

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Dear Sir or Madam, I recently attended an insightful
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 workshop which was conducted by a famous trainer. As a part of the
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 activity, I would like to impart the seminar's learnings
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 my subordinates. The session was based on a theme which was
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 at
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 with the topic called
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"Importance of Ergonomics". Since we are
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 using laptops and gadgets for our
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 purpose, it
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 our health indirectly because of the incorrect posture.
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 syndrome due to frequent typing, fatigue and neck or back pain. I will give a practical demonstration of using
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work
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 environment optimally to reduce
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body stressors.
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, putting books underneath the laptop to raise it to our eye level,
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 avoiding stress on our neck. Simple solutions could help us stay healthy and
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 productivity. We have a deadline
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the
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 Wednesday and would like to conduct the training post that. Friday will be convenient as
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 is lighter as compared to the other days. Looking forward to hearing your thoughts on my proposal. Yours faithfully, Devika

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