many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. some people however that other types of progress are equally important for a country

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Economic
growth
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is
a
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very essential for a
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. Some
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say that without economic progress a
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development is
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A
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countries
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economic
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economy

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are developed if a consumer brought homes and businesses. Others counter that there are many adequate developments
are
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eqally
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important for a
country
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such
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as living standard, educational standard and health care.
First
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of all, economic
growth
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are
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is

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developed by consumer spending and
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business
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business

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busuness
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business
investment.
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, buying or establishing homes. For establishing homes, home builders and
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construction
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construction

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consturtion
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construction
workers are needed, which
increase
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increases

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the
economic
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. Apart from
this
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,
business
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businesses

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are
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also expands

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also
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expand
economic
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the economic

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growth
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rate by hiring workers,
raise
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raising

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wages and
invest
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investing

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. A Company
are
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brought
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manufacturing
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lands, creating jobs for more people and spending, which usually
increase
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economic
growth
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. As
a
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outcome,
governments
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can easily develop a
country
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.
On the other hand
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, other types of progress are equally important for a
country
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.
For instance
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, increase living
standard
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standards

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by helping poor people,
such
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as most of the people in Bangladesh
are
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below
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poverty
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the proverty
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poverty
level. Only
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can help to bring up them from
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poverty
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proverty
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poverty
, and
also
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governments
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can build
free
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education system. As a consequence,
this
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education system
help
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some
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those who do not have enough wealth for sending their children to school.
Governments
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can
also
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help society by providing some health care
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facilities
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facillities
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,
by
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creating new hospitals in
urban
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area
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, which
totally
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free of cost.
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, those
type
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types

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of developments
are
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equally
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important
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imortant
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important
fo
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the
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. To conclude,
i
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believe that for a
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`s development economic progress
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in
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not important at all.
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can develop their
country
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by providing
people`s
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needs and wants. I recommended all
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country
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should follow
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this
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essential steps.

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  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
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