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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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With the rapid development of various transportation,
people
 become easier to travel anywhere.
Tourism
 not only
provide
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 huge financial income to local government
,
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butsometimes
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but sometimes
also
 bring some problems which are difficult to deal with. As far as I am concerned,
although
 there are several disadvantages for visitors build some problems when they having a trip, I still think benefits are more than drawbacks. Some
people
 will forget basic ethic concepts and forget to control their behaviours when they are travelling. Nowadays,
people
 have more resources to find out some local secret spots which are already banned or closed by governments. In
this
 high development
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the internet world,
people
 like to share personal status or travel experiences on websites. In order to obtain more followers, some bloggers will ignore the rules of historical spots or landscapes and take photos
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 post them on social media.
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such
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 that will lead more and more
people
 to want to try the same thing. The reasons that the place was shut down must due to its dangerous level or security issue. Environment protection is another problem that some visitors would not take care of the places or clean up the trash which is made from them, so lots of natural scenes will disappear in the future very soon. Without
tourism
, most
the
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nations will lose opportunities to promote themselves to the world or get more money.
Firstly
, the most foundational method to make the whole world know a place is to import more tourists as
as
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possible. Set a high and good reputation not only by some global records or celebrities, touring was
such
 an important role.
Secondly
, those
people
 who come from different countries or places must bring some business changes that will make huge income for local stores and governments to enhance their local development. In conclusion,
tourism
 seems to be necessary for most countries
although
 it sometimes brings some problems. For me, getting rid of bad habitat during travelling should be managed by everyone,
tourism
 still has more benefits than drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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