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The diagram illustrates the usual way in which milk is produced. Overall, there are eight stages of its manufacture, beginning with cows grazing and culminating in delivery to supermarkets and various stores.
Firstly
, cows consume green grass and
then
 they are milked carefully by a special machine twice a day.
Secondly
,
this
 product goes to the storage called refrigeration where it is kept cold for a period of time. After that, a large tanker supplies it to Dairy every day to produce ready goods and
then
 sell them. In
the
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Dairy
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 several actions are done to turn milk into different kinds of products. The
first
 one is making cheese, cream and butter out of
this
 raw material. Another option is to pasteurize it and pack the goods.
Last
 but not least, the products are delivered to supermarkets or shops where they are sold and a profit is made in
such
 a way
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