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Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #teenagers #community #work #time #benefit
In a
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neighbourhood
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neighborhood
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people
 have to
endeavor
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 together if they want to live in high living standard. Voluntary
work
 is an advantageous option for
teenagers
 who wants
to begin
 working and helping their
community
, many are the benefits and locals’ opinions. In
this
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 I am going to give some examples of both views of
this
 type of
work
 . There are
also
 some advantages regarding voluntary service. While working in their own
community
teenagers
 could broaden their social skills. During
this
 time, those
people
 could get along with some senior locals and change experiences,
for example
. It is the perfect way to start developing working skills when delivering the mail, walking with a pet of a local,
cleaning
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 the pool in the club
this
 is some of the real services that an inexperienced teenager could evolve. In
community
service
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 young
people
 could not have to have experience and is light
work
 in which
teenagers
 could easily get experience and learn the value and importance of all labour sectors.
Besides
 that, some
people
 could misjudge
this
 kind of job because it gives the false impression that those who are serving the
community
 are required to do so because they might have done something wrong or harmful to others. In conclusion, we could see that there are more advantages than disadvantages
in
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 sending
teenagers
 to do voluntary
work
, and,
as a result
 of
this
 kind of
work
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 the
community
 leaders could invest their efforts in other businesses that are more important
such
 as finding health and education professionals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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