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The issue of gay marriage remains controversial. Some people think that this trend has adverse effects on the society while others believe that it is seen as a natural trend and right for people to choose this type of marriage. Should gay marriage be legal? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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acceptable for individuals,so,they argue
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and they have their own reasons that approving
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 decision for the community,while ,others have supported
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these couples that must
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 own their freedom to choose the
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 I agree with the latter statement because if we will
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 an unlegality to these persons ,we will hide and ignore them and it may be the source of
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 divorce and
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 partner and it is due to different sexual orientation of each couple
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 because it is not acceptable by the country,
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 to the
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 I have seen many refugees from other countries that have divorced and run from their land that they will gain the loved person.ar a result, alongside
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divorce , the
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 able an effective role in
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