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Some people think sport competition creates many trouble while others disagree. Discuss your views and give your opinion

#people #sport #competition #trouble
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Nowaday
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, there are a lot of
sport
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 competitions around the world. Numerous humans said that
sport
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competition
 gets a lot of issues, whereas some disagree. In my experience, I think
sport
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competition
 has many pros and cons.
First
,
sport
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competition
 creates some cons issues
such
 as
competitor's
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competitors'
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problems
porblems
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problems
 and fan's problems. In a
competition
 or training time, many
competitor
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competitors
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 have got accidents which
somtimes
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sometimes
 were very severe like
broken
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a broken
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 limb or head trauma. Cong Anh, who is my favourite soccer player,
have
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 got
many
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 trauma in his career, and especially in
a
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international competitions mark, he got broken his right leg. there are not only competitor's
problem
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problems
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 but there are
also
 many fan's problems. Many
fan
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fans
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 have bet on their favourite team by almost their possession until they lost
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everything
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every thing
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everything
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. On other hand, It is a
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familiar
familar
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familiar
 social activity in the world which help people to relax and improve
individual's
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an individual's
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 health. Like music or films, there are many
sport
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 programs on TV so that many individuals can watch them for entertainment in their leisure time. My father and I often watch football mark together
in
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 the weekend. Because of
sport
,
the
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people's physical knowledge
improve
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improves
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. The more people understand how to play
sport
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the sport
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 well, the more they get knowledge about their physical activities. In conclusion,
although
 there are some drawbacks
such
 as
sport
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 trauma and bet game, there are many benefits
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like
lke
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like
 the improvement of physical health,
social
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and social
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connection
conection
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connection
. I still love to play
sport
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sports
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 and follow
sport
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competition
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