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Some people say it is important to keep your home and your workplace tidy , with everything organised and in the correct place. What is your opinion about this ?

#people #home #workplace #place
It is very necessary to keep the
workplace
 and home
clean
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 are the two places we spent
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most
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mostly
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most
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 time in a day. So keeping it clean and all things sorted is very much an essential and
i
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 personally agree
to
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 that
view point
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viewpoint
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.
Firstly
, keeping the
workplace
 organised and clean
,
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 gives us
the
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 positive vibration which
incline
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 our productivity lever.
This
 helps us not to pile the job for the
next
 day. The tidy
workplace
also
 let us access
to
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the thing which we need frequently and saves our time.
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instance
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 if our
work place
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workplace
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 is messy than we have to
spent
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 lots of time searching the things or
docuemts
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documents
 which will reduce our productivity and
its
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it's
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 a bad sign in the organisation because all the documents are stored in the office is more important and valuable. So the
workplace
 should be clean and organised.
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Secondly
Secondlly
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Secondly
, the house is called the temple in our
indian
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 tradition, and
temple
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the temple
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 is always clean and organised. In
indian
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Indian
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beliefs
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,beliefs
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 it is said that god
exist
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 where there is
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cleanness
cleaness
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cleanness
 because
its
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it
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 reflects
the
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purity, peace and, harmony.
The
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 organised and clean house helps us to access
the
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apply
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things without any
hurdle
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.
This
 is
also
the
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a
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 sign of healthy living,
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because
becuase
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because
clean
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a clean
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house
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houses
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dont
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don't
 give birth to insects,
mosquitos
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and mosquitos
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 through which we get sick.
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. If we have properly kept our closet with
clothers
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clothes
 organised
than
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then
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 when we need to take
out
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it out
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 it is easily
accessable
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accessible
, we
dont
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don't
 have to move here and there in search of it. To culminate,
Clean
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 and tidy environment
help
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helps
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 us in increasing productivity,
less
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fewer
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 health issues, keeps
motivated
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us motivated
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 and relief from any type of loss.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • organised
  • clutter-free
  • productivity
  • mental clarity
  • efficiency
  • professionalism
  • first impressions
  • ergonomics
  • aesthetically pleasing
  • compulsive neatness
  • functional space
  • minimising distractions
  • systematic arrangement
  • time management
  • work-life balance
  • streamline
  • feng shui
  • optimal performance
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