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Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

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The pie charts depict the number of
visitors
 to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after the renovation. It
also
 shows the satisfaction levels which are divided into very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied, and no response during the same two periods. Generally, the redevelopment of the building not only has increased the total guest but
also
 escalated their satisfaction level. It is evidenced by the total guest who felt satisfied and very satisfied rose steeply after the refurbishment. At
first
, the total of guests before the refurbishment was only 74.000
visitors
. In
this
 period, the satisfaction level was dominated by 40% dissatisfied guests, meanwhile, guests who felt very satisfied and satisfied were only 15% and 30%.
Then
, the remaining of them were very dissatisfied and had no responses. At
last
, the number of
visitors
 grew sharply to 92.000 after the museum was renovated. While, the total of very satisfied
visitors
 had a remarkable rise to 35%, in the same period, the satisfied
visitors
also
 escalated significantly to 40%.
In contrast
, dissatisfied
visitors
 numbers decline steeply to 15%, followed by the decreases of very dissatisfied and no response
visitors
.
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  • trend
  • pattern
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  • contrast
  • similarity
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  • highlight
  • summarize
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