You recently took a part-time job working for a local company. After a few weeks, you realised there were some problems with the job. Write a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter: explain why you took the job describe the problems that you experienced suggest what could be done about them

Dear manager, I am writing to you to express you I noticed there are some problems in your accounting system and other sections which I paid your attention to them because most of them have a significant impact on your benefit's company.
Firstly
, I should say, I will graduate in accounting
next
June, for
this
reason, I had to find part-time work
also
because of my practical survey about make more benefit at companies I choose your company and became hire as an accountant assistant. After a few days and when I evaluated your accounting system I found some huge costs which must be in basic costs, be deducted of current benefits.
this
method has expired
also
I see your accountant considers some of the future income ,
instead
of current income and it has a bad impact on your total benefit. I have some suggestions to create desirable conditions ,
for example
, you can replace your old accounting system with another ,
in addition
, your accountant has to recognize each transaction correct in terms of time. Thank you for taking the time and your consideration of my letter. Yours faithfully, Salehi
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  • thirdly
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  • moreover
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  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
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  • despite

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