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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go Hungary Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Advancement in technology has fulfilled the gap in every part of the world ,especially in the agriculture field. Despite
this
, the majority of
people
 around the globe still have to tackle the problem of fits of hunger.
This
 essay will examine the reasons for
this
 before suggesting some possible methods to eliminate
this
 worldwide issue. The predominant factor resulting in famine is gaping between the needy and affluent
people
 because of
this
 wealthy
people
 can access food
first
 in comparison to poor
people
. The
second
 most important factor that causes
this
 situation is the political power that basically provides permission to a richer section to intaking a healthy diet.
However
,
people
 who belong to the
under
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poverty
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 line have to remain with hunger.
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, In ,Africa more than half
number
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 of children have suffered from malnutrition because of a lack of food in their region. The solutions are not simple.
First
 of all, the local authorities should reduce the heavy taxes that are imposed on crops and seeds.
Consequently
, the farmer could afford
such
 a reduction and ultimately increases the farm yield which
further
 serves
people
 with basic food supplements.
Secondly
, the bridge that has been generated between rich and poor should be overcome
as a result
,
this
 will resolve the issue of hungriness which is the biggest problem among the community despite, having better agricultural facilities.
Therefore
, the word Hungary would only be removed through stringent steps that have been taken by the government. In conclusion, in spite of
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advancements in agriculture
people
 all over the world ,
,
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still go hungry and it could only have culminated through the removal of discrimination between rich and poor as well as lessening the prices of crops.
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