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It is important for people to take risk both in their professional lives and their personal lives ,do you think the advantages of taking risks out weigh the disadvantages?

#people #risk #lives #risks
It is said that taking
risks
 brings a lot of benefits.
However
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 it
also
 gives us some throwbacks.
First
 of all, it is obvious that taking
risks
 will cause a great loss if
people
 do it and fail. In personal
life
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this
 loss might not be so harmful.
However
, it will be really helpful in professional life, because
people
 take responsibility not only for themselves but
also
others
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such
 as colleagues, customers and their families. It will even damage
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society from
the
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 economic point.
On the other hand
, we can receive huge benefits by taking
risks
.
Firstly
, we can learn how to prepare for one goal through
this
 process. In order to achieve the aim,
people
 will make all the effort to think about it and try to find
more
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 efficient way. If they do
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professional circumstances, they will recognize the responsibility and importance of cooperation.
Also
, it will be completely meaningful even though
people
 can not achieve the goal after taking
risks
. They would learn the reason why they have failed and how to change it. The failure will enable them to improve their skills and
to
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achieve their
object
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next
 time. As I mentioned it is true that taking
risks
give
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 us both advantages and disadvantages.
However
, it can be argued that the benefits outweigh the drawbacks in that we can obtain advantages not only from the result but
also
 from the process of taking
risks
.
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