Your friend wants to send her/his child to learn music. He/she asked you for some information about the music academy that you went to. Write him/her a letter. You should: - Describe the music school - Suggest a teacher or a class to go to - Explain why you recommend it.

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Dear Rohan, Hello! I hope you and your family members are fine during

this

covid19 period. I am writing

this

letter to inform

about

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you about

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music

class . As you know, we

are

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apply

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met in

garden

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the garden

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last

week and you tell about your children that so much

interest

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interested

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music

. The

music

school is very near to my apartment so

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easily go

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there and it's

very

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big campus. There are many facilities available and so many player instruments are here.

Moreover

reena

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Reena

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ma'am is

very

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polite person and

have

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lost

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apply

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knowledge about

music

. You will

also

put

there

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children on her.

However

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know you

also

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are also

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interested in

music

but you

was not join

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music

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class because you have some family responsibilities .

This

school is very popular and trustable so

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recommend

this

school . Hope meet see you soon Warm wishes, Neha

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

9 paragraphs

147 words

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