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Some people believe that the fast pace and stress of modern life is having a negative effect on families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is obvious that individuals have more responsibilities compared to past generations. There are those who support that modern life puts a strain on
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 affecting families negatively. In my view,
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 situation is
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 based on their lifestyle.
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, Despite a variety of advantages, living in a metropolitan city causes some drawbacks in general.
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 who live in major cities should put more effort into a livelihood.
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, they strictly bond their obligations mainly because expenditure on accommodation, food and entertainment which are significantly more than
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 areas. The amount of budget which is allocated to
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 by the tenant would be a great example of
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 of these factors, professionals work under pressure and spend less time with their families which in turn leads to a negative family environment.
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, Even though it is considerably less compared to the past, there are still
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 in rural areas or villages. Regarding these
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, life contains less stress and speed as they generally run their own work
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 as farming and run errands easily.
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, family members working together help each other and share responsibilities. Indeed, more freedom brings a healthier psychological condition and better relationship with the family.
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, living in the harmony with nature decreases the stress level of
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 supports their family bonds. In conclusion, it is argued that the community struggled with family issues because of the modern living conditions.
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 problem is quite pervasive these days, it might be counteracted by doing a change in the way of living.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern life
  • fast pace
  • stress
  • negative effect
  • family bonds
  • working hours
  • conflicts
  • advancements in technology
  • distract
  • family time
  • financial pressures
  • living standards
  • strain
  • individuals
  • family activities
  • traditions
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