Smoking should be banned in public places. Do what extinct you agree or disagree?

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Most countries don't allow smoking in
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the public
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community
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because of the side effects. Not allowing people to not smoke in
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the public
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neighborhood
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give
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the crowd
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a better awareness of the disadvantages. Some people think smoking might make you feel relaxed and focused. But, smoking causes health issues to your body, especially
teenagers
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, because it will affect them as their
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and body grow.
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, once you continue to keep smoking in public
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. Other
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will be affected by you and it might give them health issues, unlike your body which won't be affected as them. People usually spend money thinking that
cigarettes
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are cheap and it won't affect their financial status. But the reality is,
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affects them because
cigarettes
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are expensive.
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, if you kept spending money to buy
cigarettes
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from your parents.
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, your parents will be in a bad financial situation. When the other kids see someone smoke in public
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they might ignore them and keep going. But you will see them growing and
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smoking
cigarettes
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because someone influenced them to smoke.
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, if your son saw you smoking at an early age.
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, he will start smoking too because of your
behavior
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. In brief, smoking in public
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has many disadvantages, and taking
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decision will reduce the side effects of doing it in public
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