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Some people believe that rich countries should provide poor countries with help that is not financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #countries #aid
Nowadays, we live
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 the globalization era which you have seen
about
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how prosperous
nations
 give
supports
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 to
another
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countries
 ,and it has been widely claimed that some individuals have the ideas that developed
countries
 should support nonfinancial
aids
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 to developing
nations
. From my point of view, I totally agree with the statement and my reasons will be discussed in detail.
To begin
 with, I strongly believe that one of the most effective
way
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 that rich
countries
 should
do
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is providing
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educational support in many aspects, like agricultural technology and human resources to poorer
nations
 because
the
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education is
very
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 important and indispensable factor to develop the country.
Moreover
, if children have the opportunity to study in
effective
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 way they can come back to improve many things in their society.
Additionally
, I personally think that they should encourage more trade opportunities between two types of
nations
 because the poorer country can export their agricultural products to rich
nations
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 lower price tax .
According to the
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 economic news from
local
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 news channel, they told us about how benefits of trade opportunities to developing
nations
 because if they have a trading contact it will force them to develop more
about
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local facilities. To conclude, I personally agree with
this
 viewpoint since it seems to fix the problems at the root of the causes which are how to improve the standard of education and
to
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promote more international commerce. These
countries
 have the resources to improve the lives of the people from poor
nations
. The technical know-how from affluent
nations
 should be shared to impoverish
nations
 and not ignore the needs of disadvantaged populations.
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