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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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While university
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 is no longer considered a luxury nowadays, in the past, only
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privileged
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privileged
 individuals were able to do so. To that extent, many
people
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 believe that it has a positive impact on the community, others,
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, believe that the quality of
education
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 is deteriorating because of it. In
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 essay, I will explain the positive impact of the increasing amount of
students
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 going to universities as well as the drawbacks. The increasing number of university
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 has lots of benefits.
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, the increasing number of educated
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 creates a better society. Many studies have shown that the crime rate is negatively correlated to the level of
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 society.
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, more educated
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 improve the nation’s economy. Educated
people
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 are more productive and provide more value to their country's economy. Despite the benefits, it
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 comes with a few drawbacks.
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 with, the teaching process inside the classroom is not going to be effective.
People
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 understand things in different ways, but since the teachers have to teach many
students
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, the method of teaching becoming more general and not personalized.
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, more
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creates
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 more competition and it pressuring the
students
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. The stress of competition might make the
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to
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cheat in order to get a better score.
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, the purpose of
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 will not be fulfilled because
students
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 focus more on grades than on learning. In conclusion, more
people
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 are going to universities today than it was before. Even though some
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 believe that
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 is a good thing, others believe that it
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 has some drawbacks.
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