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There has been a dramatic growth in the number of people studying at universities in the last few decades. While some people see this as a positive trend which raises the general level of education within the community, others fear that it is lowering the quality of education. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the increase in student numbers at university?

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While university
education
 is no longer considered a luxury nowadays, in the past, only
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privileged
priviliged
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privileged
 individuals were able to do so. To that extent, many
people
 believe that it has a positive impact on the community, others,
however
, believe that the quality of
education
 is deteriorating because of it. In
this
 essay, I will explain the positive impact of the increasing amount of
students
 going to universities as well as the drawbacks. The increasing number of university
students
 has lots of benefits.
Firstly
, the increasing number of educated
people
 creates a better society. Many studies have shown that the crime rate is negatively correlated to the level of
education
of
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 society.
Secondly
, more educated
people
 improve the nation’s economy. Educated
people
 are more productive and provide more value to their country's economy. Despite the benefits, it
also
 comes with a few drawbacks.
To begin
 with, the teaching process inside the classroom is not going to be effective.
People
 understand things in different ways, but since the teachers have to teach many
students
, the method of teaching becoming more general and not personalized.
Furthermore
, more
students
creates
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 more competition and it pressuring the
students
. The stress of competition might make the
students
to
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cheat in order to get a better score.
Therefore
, the purpose of
education
 will not be fulfilled because
students
 focus more on grades than on learning. In conclusion, more
people
 are going to universities today than it was before. Even though some
people
 believe that
this
 is a good thing, others believe that it
also
 has some drawbacks.
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