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The best way to solve world's environmental problem is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#world #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
nowadays,The production of transport
vehicles
are
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 increasing very fast
in
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apply
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all over the world.In
this
case
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 if the production value increases
then
 the environmental problems
also
increases
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increase
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 equally.we can see the
air
 pollution due to the function of
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fuel-based
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fuel based
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fuel-based
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vehicles
 like
car
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cars
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,
bus
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buses
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,
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and truck
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truck
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trucks
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.they are producing too much
of
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apply
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carbonated
air
 from their engines.it would be spoiling our environment continuously.transportation is the biggest need for
humans
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humans'
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 routine life.
one
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On one
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 side factories are manufacturing lots of
vehicles
 daily on the other side humans are destroying forests which
makes
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make
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 pure oxygenated
air
 for living things
of
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on
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 earth.
Incase
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 If we increase the cost of fuel for cars and other
vehicles
 there is no use.because today
peoples
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people
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 are earning lots of money in
this
 running modern world.so In my point of
view
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 we need to get
a
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an
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 alternative way of transportation
vehicles
.let
we
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us
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 think about electric
vehicles
 which
is
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are
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 not
producing
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produce
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air
 pollution. electric
vehicles
 are functioning from batteries.we can charge it through electricity.today we can
getting
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get
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 electricity easily from windmills,
nuclear
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and nuclear
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 power plants.so we all need
change
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to change
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into
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to
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 electric
vehicles
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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