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More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending time in communities in poorer countries doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses. Why is this? Who benefits more from this, the communities or these young people?

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It is undeniable that those who are young from developed
countries
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 are likely to go to poorer
countries
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 to spend their time
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doing charity work.
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 reason why
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 is beneficial for these young
people
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. Coupled with the increasing
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social media usage among young
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, they are easily exposed to the current issues and severe situations of
people
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 living in different
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. It
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 to arouse affluent
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's interest
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people
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 living in
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desperate poverty.
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, young generations watch videos from all over the world and they easily recognize the situation of
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 from poor
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 who are
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 harmful situation or need financial help.
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, they are motivated to do charity
works
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 overseas.
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 who
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 without
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 paid.
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 of all, it entails the students
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 their views. By spending time in other
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, they learn
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about different
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 cultures and experience various perspectives which are more valuable than money.
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, those who have
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experience
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 in volunteering overseas are likely to get a promising
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jobs
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 in the future. Take Samsung
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, a global leading company, they give incentives to candidates having involved in social activities abroad in that those applicants are considered as open-minded and actively cooperative in a team.
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, young
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 can get a better chance to get an admirable job. To conclude, as exposure to social media is increasing
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more young
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 from developed
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 are affected to involve in a community to provide volunteering services for developing
country
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 and
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 phenomenon is beneficial to them eventually by broadening their views and getting a better career chance. I hope more young
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 decide to support developing
countries
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 in the future.
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