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Many working people get little or no exercise either the working day or in their free time, and have problems as a result. Why do many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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The pie chart depicts the information about the percentile of spending on food, clothing,
medicine
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 and household goods from 1995 to 2011. After analyses, it can be seen clearly that the funds spent on food was 68% in the former
year
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 and
however
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, it decreased by 9 per cent in a later
year
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.
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, the people of China
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 almost the same percentage of their funds on
medicine
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 in both years. The pie chart
further
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 collates that, in 1995 the expenditure on household goods was 9%, while the minimum increment is seen by 4 per cent in the
year
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 2011. Whilst, spending on
medicine
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 by Chinese people in the previous
year
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 was only 4% but
this
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 increased and reached
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12 per cent in the
year
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 2011. Overall, the maximum expenditure done by the people of China is on food, whereas less on
medicine
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.
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