Many women are choosing to have children later in life. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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women
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career
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, so they will have
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because some of them believe that they must work as
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professional
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professionals
after they finish their education, and make good money.
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made their choice due to the bill of
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debt they have during studying in
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college
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college
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are
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argument that
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must have
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in
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that
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cause the reproduction
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of
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will
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menopause
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certain
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time. There are
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possibilities
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can't have
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if they have monopose. According
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that monopose, if
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have
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it will impact the
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too. The long gap
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the ages
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parents and the
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will not good
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the growth of the
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's graduation,
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's married or when
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have a daughter.
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the other hand,
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have their reasons
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why they choose to have
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later.
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with
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,
women
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want to have the same
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are
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no
differences
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during
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women
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and
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debt during pay their tuition fees.
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married
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bachelors, finish their
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to get married most of them will force themself to make
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.
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era
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our
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, a lot of people married before they turn
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.
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and the tuition fee, force people to take
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men
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they
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good
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a good
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after they
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work hard
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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