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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are some
people
 who want to spend their lives
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doing one thing repetitively without doing any change at all.
However
, there are
also
 many other
people
 who are always excited and passionate to make
changes
 as they have
positive
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 attitude towards those
things
.
This
 is simply just a difference in personalities of
people
 but making
changes
 should include deep consideration of possible outcomes. Some
people
 are afraid of trying new
things
 as they find it comfortable for them. Actually, those
people
 are just afraid of the consequences of
changes
.
Thus
, they try to settle their
life
 in a comfort zone and have a stable
life
 without any excitement in their daily
life
.
Such
people
 follow the process set by their seniors to avoid possible negative outcomes by walking a new path.
Nevertheless
, there are
also
people
 who are regarded as
risk takers
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. They seem to be less afraid of experiencing failure than missing a better result by doing
changes
.
This
 kind of personality is commonly found in
people
 like entrepreneurs. They always make adjustments and try new
things
 with the expectation of having a better outcome. If there is
more
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a more
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 efficient way to their goal, they will take
that
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 way without hesitation. Those
people
 are
also
 fond of learning new
things
, setting consecutive goals and challenging themselves about their abilities. They take
changes
 as positive
things
, and
thus
, they have no fear of negative impacts caused by
changes
. In conclusion, different
people
 have different perspectives about
changes
, but, we all should calculate the risk we are going to take beforehand In my opinion, a
life
 without excitement is boring, but we should only do major changing decisions wisely.
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  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
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