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These days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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Nowadays, it is impossible to be completely apart from technology
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 the pandemic.
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,
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 has brought many people to work from home.
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, I believe that the drawbacks overweight the advantages of
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 cause. Certainly, the home office has become popular in our society over the
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 few years. Indeed, one of the most remarkable prose is the facility and
comfortability
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 that the home office can provide. One clear example is when I used to have virtual classes through a platform called "Zoom" during the pandemic.
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,
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made it easier for me to get my assignments and projects done on
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.
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, I had more
time
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 to
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prepared
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 for my exams.
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, it should be considered that one of the biggest disadvantages is the negative impact related to social skills. The effects of spending a lot of
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 in front of a screen and
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 being isolated from the world can be incredibly damaging to mental health.
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, after spending a considerable amount of
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 with my computer
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 my school and not being able to see my friends, I started to feel depressed and eager about everything.
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 made me realize that
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 to be a balance between having a social life and working at the same
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 in order to maintain good mental health. To summarize, working from the comfort zone has its pros
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 cons. Meanwhile, the downsides overweight the benefits of the simple fact that affects social skills.

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Expand the discussion on disadvantages and advantages with more specific examples.
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