The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world
The pie charts illustrate the three types of
use
of
water
in North
America
, South
America
, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
and Southeast
Asia
. Generally, the majority of
water
is
useduse
Correct your spelling
used
for agricultural purposes,
whereas
the domestic usage of
water
is very less in four different areas and industrial
use
in two areas. In North
America
and Europe, the industrial
use
of
water
is the highest
by
Change preposition
at
show examples
48% and 53%, respectively,
,
Change the punctuation
apply
show examples
however
the domestic
use
of
water
is the lowest in both areas.
On the other hand
in South
America
, the majority of
water
usage is for Agricultural
use
and the lesser
use
is by Industries. In Africa, Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
, the major
use
of
water
is for agricultural purposes by 84%, 88% and 81%, respectively,
whereas
in Africa the industrial
use
of
water
is decline
Change the verb form
is declining
show examples
CORRECT YOUR SPELLING declined The word decline doesn’t seem to fit
this
context. Consider replacing it with a different one. show examples by 7%. Domestic
use
of
water
in Central
Asia
and South East
Asia
remain
Correct subject-verb agreement
remains
show examples
CHANGE THE VERB FORM remains The verb
remain
Change the verb form
remains
show examples
does not seem to agree with the subject. Consider changing the verb form. show examples
Change preposition
of
show examples
the same.
Submitted by vkworkss on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words use, water, america, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 3 times.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
What to do next:
Look at other essays: