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Art is considered an essential part of all cultures throughout the world. However, these days fewer and fewer people appreciate art and turn their focus to science, technology, and business. Why do you think that is? What could be done to encouragmore people to take an interest in the artiststs?

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In earlier days
people
 are mostly engaged in different forms of art activities.But now the situation has changed and
people
 are more inclined towards other sectors like science, technology and business. I will discuss more in detail the possible reasons for
people
 taking less interest in
arts
. To commence with, in the olden days parents encourage their children to take up
arts
 as part of their education and there is positive encouragement from the
government
 and society as well, but now in the modern era with technological advances parents and children are
also
 taking more interest in science and technology sectors. One of the possible reasons for
this
 could be there is less profit and opportunities . The recognition from the
government
 is
also
 not that great in
arts
.
In contrast
 to
arts
, there are more opportunities to grow in other sectors as in today's world where we are completely
dependant
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 on science and technology. With
this
,
people
 are getting more jobs with high salaries
unlike
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arts
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in arts
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.
People
 are
also
 getting more abroad opportunities in other fields. Lack of awareness about the importance of
arts
 is
also
 one of the reasons for looking down
at
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arts
. To encourage more
people
 to take interest in
arts
 is to create an
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awareness
awarness
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awareness
on
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 describing the importance of
arts
 in our culture and knowing its legacy.
First
 of all,
Government
 and educational institutions should make
arts
as
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mandatory in their course, so that its importance can be taught to children from their childhood onwards.
Government
 should
also
 recognise the good work done in
arts
 and should reward
people
,
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so that it will be encouraging to others.
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