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Tourism is encouraged in many countries. Does tourism bring more advantages or disadvantages to a country?

Many countries around the world enjoy and encourage
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tourism
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 and travelling visitors. In
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 essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages that
tourism
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 can bring to a country. Quite clearly, one of the biggest benefits of global and local
tourism
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 is the huge boost to economies that
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 can bring. Many
people
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 know that when they
travel
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travel,
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 they will quite often spend a lot of money
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 sometimes in local shops or businesses.
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, as
people
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 visit new locations, they will purchase goods and souvenirs of
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 place,
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 use local facilities
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 as transport or restaurants.
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, a great advantage of
people
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 visiting countries or cities they have never been to can be that they develop their understanding of a new place and foreign culture.
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 led to a better knowledge of how
people
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 around the world live their lifestyles.
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, by knowing different languages, we can all come to respect each other much more.
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, one of the biggest disadvantages of
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 can be reliance on
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 as a source of income. If an area relies heavily on
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tourists
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 spending money there, but
tourists
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do
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stop visiting,
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this
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 can be devastating for the local economy.
Covid-19
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COVID-19
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 has meant that global
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 has crashed, leaving many countries that need
tourists
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 for income in a dire financial situation.
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, globetrotting can
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 mean a huge increase in environmental pollution and problems. Many
people
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 need to travel by air
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 as we
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know,
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 planes are a huge contributor to carbon emissions
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, which
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 lead to global warming.
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 to
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, as
tourists
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 travel to a location, they may cause pollution through littering or not caring for the local environment
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 the local population might. In conclusion, we can clearly see that there are many advantages and disadvantages when considering the effects of
tourism
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.

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task response
Task response: You cover both sides and show you understand the topic. To raise the score, add a clear view in the final part and give more well‑developed ideas and good examples.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Use more linking words to show how ideas fit together. Use a simple plan: point, example, result. Check small grammar to help flow.
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Task response: Build your points more. Explain why the points matter and add more real facts or examples from places.
coherence
Coherence and cohesion: Paragraphs are OK, but some sentences are long. Break long sentences into shorter ones and keep a simple line of thought.
content
The topic is clear and the essay covers both sides.
content
An example (Covid-19) is used to back a point.
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