Due to advances in science, it is now possible for people to live to 100 years old or even longer. While some people think it is a good thing, others do not agree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There has been a controversy about whether prolonged
life
expectancy
is advantageous to our society. I think
this
situation
is a double-edged sword, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
First
and foremost. It can make our
life
more meaningful. As we know, our
first
18 years and
last
10 years are either for school or hospital;
therefore
, the time that we can spend for ourselves is limited.
For example
, some
people
always want to travel around and see different cultures;
however
, due to their limited time,
this
is hard to achieve. Take my father as an example. He constantly wants to visit Japan;
nevertheless
, on account of his heavy workload,
this
wish seems impossible to achieve. At
this
point, should our
life
is expanded, there are more chances to realize our goals.
Second
, it can propel human technological development. As mentioned in the
last
paragraph, we don't have much time for ourselves; the same
situation
with the scientists. According to some statistical figures, a scientific project usually requires years;
however
, some scientists' bodies don't allow them to live
this
long. In
this
case, it's commonplace that they pass away in the middle of the research, and a more vital fact is that the results of most scientific research are unteachable;
in other words
, their students need to find out the outcome by themselves. As a consequence,
such
a phenomenon can bring about a vicious circle and hinder the improvement of human civilization to a large extent. If those scientists' lives can be prolonged,
then
this
situation
can be prevented.
On the other hand
, an increase in
life
expectancy
can render some negative results.
For instance
, due to the increase in
life
expectancy
, we are facing an ageing population. The number of elderly
people
is rising;
hence
, the government needs to pay them more pensions annually.
As a result
,
this
situation
can adversely affect the country's finance. It's worth mentioning that an ageing population is causing an unemployment crisis for young
people
as well. Those elderly are taking away young
people
's opportunities. In conclusion, the advantages of an increased
life
expectancy
outstrip its disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • longevity
  • life expectancy
  • healthcare system
  • wisdom
  • resource scarcity
  • advancements
  • social support
  • lifelong learning
  • environmental impact
  • consumption
  • technological changes
  • personal and societal growth
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