Some parents believe that a child should not waste time by reading entertainment books, instead they should spend time to read educational books only. What is your opinion about this.

learning is one of the most important differences between humans and animals
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all aspects. In ,fact if children follow their interests
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the topics that are
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about them they will have a better gain. so they could follow their own major they are looking for their future.
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they will not be enough. I believe
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if the parents even encourage their
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to follow their own
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in their own interests
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his/her free time it could improve the skills of reading comprehension , imagination, and writing skills. many writers or film writers or directors could come from
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the way I believe that learning in all aspects could
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ourselves from yesterday to today and between us and other creatures .
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by learning our interest topics we would enjoy more and
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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