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The best way to travel is travel in a group led by a tour guide To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#travel #group #tour #guide
It is certainly true that nowadays
people
 prefer to move
numerous
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 countries to enjoy their holidays. Some
human
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humans
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 opined that
wanderer
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wanderers
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 must
tour
 around the world in a
group
 with a
tour
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touring
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instructor
. I partially agree with
this
 statement as many citizens
prefers
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 to travel alone rather than
enjoying
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trip
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the trip
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 in a
group
.
To begin
 , with the positive outcomes of having a guide,
firstly
 because
of
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they are professional.They have
information
 about each part of the world.
Therefore
, a traveller can easily collect
information
 about the place from the
instructor
.
For instance
, In
India
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foreigner
foriegner
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foreign
people
 have an
instructor
 with them to get vast
information
of
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about
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the
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ancient Indian history.
In addition
, It is
a
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safe for
a
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people
 to travel in a
group
 under the mentor's presence since in many places travellers are easily robbed by local citizens.
Consequently
, to protect themselves from any
hazardeous
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hazardous
 event most
of
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the explorer
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explorer
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explorers
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 prefer to have a trip in a
group
.
On the
Contrary
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, due to the advancement of technology
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,
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everything is available on
the
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Google which
in
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result a wanderer can get
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information
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an
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any
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information
 regarding the place
at
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free of cost from the internet.
Consequently
, It is cheaper for them
as
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compare
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 to
have
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having
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 a
tour
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touring
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instructor
.
For example
, In developed
countries
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people
 do
a
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research online to collect
the
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information
 about the place in which they check
weather
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the weather
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,
hotel
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and hotel
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 prices and make
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a plan
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plan
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 according to their budget. In conclusion, backpackers must travel in a
group
 and have a
tour
 guide to explore different places and get knowledge about the cities
also
 if they have cutting edge gadgets
then
 they can easily wander places independently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • convenience
  • safety
  • organization
  • knowledgeable
  • itinerary
  • local customs
  • language barrier
  • freedom
  • flexibility
  • random
  • spontaneous
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