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Because of the busy pace of modern life, many children spend most of their time indoors and have little exposure to the natural world. Discuss the effects lack of experience with and understanding of nature can have on children as they grow up. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
children
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 are occupied with lots of things
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 as schoolwork and gadget. Many believe that due to their busy schedules, most
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 spend most of their time indoors and
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lack
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 natural
world
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exposure
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. In
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exposure
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of
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 the natural
world
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 makes
children
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lack
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 knowledge of
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 environment and why they will not be aware to save
nature
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.
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 with, not all knowledge about the natural
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 can be learned indoors. Even though school teaches students the aspects of the natural environment, it is important for them to see it in person. Types of plants,
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, is an important thing for
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youngster to understand in order to know which plants are edible and which are dangerous for consumption. If they fail to differentiate them, they may consume poisonous plants that are dangerous
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 them. Natural sites including glazer, forests, and volcanoes are another important thing for
children
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 to see. Society is trying to rehabilitate many destroyed forests, but if most of them have never seen the forest, how will they save something they have never seen themselves?
Lack
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 of natural
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exposure
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 makes
children
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 not aware to save
the
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nature
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. Since they have minimal
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of
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 the natural
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environment
enviroment
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environment
 in the
first
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 place, they will not have a sense of belonging and
also
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 the importance of saving
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. Theoretical knowledge is useless without practical skills.
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,
children
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 learned how trees can save the earth from global warming, but without the skill of planting trees,
this
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 information is going to be useless. The efforts of saving the earth will only be plans without concrete actions. In conclusion, most
children
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 are now busy with indoor activities.
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 has led them to have low
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of
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 the natural
world
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.
As a result
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, they will
lack
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 information
of
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about
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 the natural
world
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 and they will not be aware to save
nature
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 when they grow up.

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