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Cycling is more environmentally friendly than other forms of transport. Why is it not popular in many places? And how to increase its popularity?

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It was a fact that using a
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bicycle is eco-friendly but nowadays riding a bike for transportation is not famous anymore. It would happen because of
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 of infrastructure and
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 concerns. There are some significant solutions to these problems. One of the
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 is facilities inadequate. It is important to have that because
cycles
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 need to have their own space on the street.
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 a place for a stop in bad wheater or special
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 that could separate them from the heavy traffic flow. Another problem to be considered
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safety
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 concern. The riders perhaps face criminals and traffic accidents.
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 could be hit by cars or get injuries because of pickpockets on the street.
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, a possible solution to
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 problem would be an improved cycle infrastructure. These could make riders feel convenient and have the same priority as other drivers on the street. One immediate practical solution is cycle
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 management by the government. These aim to increase the
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 of
cycles
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, these groups of
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 users could be cycling without any barriers. To conclude, cycling is not popular not only because of unavailable infrastructure support but
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 for
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 reasons. These can be solved by providing special needs of
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 on the
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 and
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 management. The government should consider applying those solutions in order to raise a group of
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 on the
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