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Many people argue than in order to improve educational quality, high school students should encouraged to question and offer criticisms on their teachers. Other think this will lead to a loss of respect and discipline in clasroom. discuss both views and give your own opinon.

#people #quality #school #students #offer #criticisms #teachers #loss #respect #discipline #clasroom #opinon
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Encourage
  • Criticism
  • Engagement
  • Critical Thinking
  • Interaction
  • Feedback
  • Adjustment
  • Effective
  • Confidence
  • Communication Skills
  • Authority
  • Hierarchy
  • Experience
  • Discipline
  • Respect
  • Breakdown
  • Order
  • Source of Information
  • Leeway
  • Disruption
  • Dialogue
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