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Some believe hosting major international sporting events will bring benefits to the country. Others believe it might bring disadvantages. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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Some think that hosting
important
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the important
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 global sporting
event
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events
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 will bring advantages to a
nation
. Few people argued that
this
 might have demerits.
This
 essay will discuss the merits and drawbacks sporting activities may cause and I am of the opinion that it is of great benefit to a
country
.
Organization
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The organization
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 of global sporting programmes exposes a
nation
 to a
lot
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 foreigners which enhances the economy of a territory. Most of
this
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these
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 events
is
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are
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 an avenue for a
nation
 to accommodate a lot of individuals from all over the world, and the influx of
this
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these
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 people promotes the economic status of the
country
 because most of them will want to grace the occasion,
they
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 will book flights, stay in
hotel
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the hotel
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 throughout the period of the programme, transport to tourist attractions, restaurants and to the
event
, as well as usage of other infrastructures in order to participate in the programme. An example of
this
 is the Olympics game held in Brazil, several companies and businesses benefit from
this
 and the
country
 at large.
However
, sporting activities predisposes a
country
 to crime,
as a result
 of security agents focusing on ensuring a safe and peaceful
event
. While people are planning for the programme others are planning how to commit crimes
such
 as hotel robbery, luggage and car hijacking and other criminal acts. A typical example was an important global activity that occurred in Ghana and several crimes were reported. In conclusion,
this
 essay was able to explain the profits
in
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of
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 hosting Sporting programmes and
also
dangers
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the dangers
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 of organizing
such
event
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events
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 in a
country
. I agree with the
believes
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 that it brings great benefit to the economy of a
nation
.
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