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In many large cities, people waste hours of their time every day because of traffic congestion on the road. What are the causes of this, what solution can you suggest.

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Nowadays, most big towns have a lot of cars running on the
road
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 causes
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 gem which at times lead to different problems
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 as accidents and theft.
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 essay seeks to discuss the causes of
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 congestion in many large cities and the solutions to
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 problem.
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drivers
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 are careless and ignorant. They may see the driving instructions but still ignore them. Another issue is that
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 many developing countries have poor
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signs
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 which most of the time affect the speed of
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 during peak hours. To illustrate, in Zimbabwe, a lot of
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 lights are out of service, which causes confusion for both the
drivers
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 and pedestrians.
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 why sometimes scouts try to control the congestion which helps half of the time.
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, some of the
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 are hidden by trees and are unreadable and faint.
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 year, about 34 per cent of
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road
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 accidents were
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 poor
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signs
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. To alleviate the problems mentioned above, governments must develop strategies and very strict penalties to deal with uncautious vehicle
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.
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, poor
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signs
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 should be maintained and surrounding trees must be cut
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to preserve people's lives.
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, trees near the roads can be trimmed every quarter and billboard
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 can be maintained every six months.
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,
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 gem is
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 bad signals on the
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 and careless
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. To deal with
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 issues, those in power should introduce tough laws against uncautious
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 signals must be fixed and bushes around trimmed to keep them clear. These and other issues have been discussed above.
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