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In some countries people are forced to retire when they reach a certain age. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

#countries #people #age
There has been a lot of discussion on whether
people
 who are compelled to retire at a specific age could be considered a positive development. I believe that
people
are
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 pressured into retirement has resulted in both positive and negative effects, which must be addressed
accordingly
. Admittedly, forcing
people
 to retire brings to mind certain negative points. Nobody wants to go through forced maturation, especially if they are the primary provider or have a dependant who
need
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 ongoing financial assistance.
For instance
, children who are medically unwell require access to funds for medical costs, medicine, and doctor's fees. While it is uncommon to find a committed worker who strives for success, losing a pioneer who is familiar with every aspect of the firm would be a loss.
On the other hand
, retirement will force
people
 to spend
the
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most of their time at home, creating an opportunity to reconnect relationships and strengthen bonds with loved ones, particularly with their grandkids or any missed events.
Additionally
, if money is well handled, now is the time in life to enjoy the benefits of their efforts
such
 as by returning to the pursuits that previously fired your love.
Furthermore
, the newly available post will provide opportunities for promotion. In conclusion, while forced retirement has disadvantage
cause
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 financial issues and a shortage of qualified workers in businesses, it can
also
helpful
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 for both generations and will make everyone's life simpler
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