The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary Schools since its construction in 1950. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The three maps provide information about the development
occurred
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that occurred
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at West Park Secondary
School
from the beginning of its establishment in 1950 and over 2 periods of time in 1980 and 2010.
Overall
, the
school
increased in
size
that
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which
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gives it a chance to enhance and provide new facilities over the period given. In 1950, there were the
school
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school's
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main building in front of the main road and the playground at the back of the
school
.
Besides
that, there were several blocks
for
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of
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houses and farmland on the opposite side. By 1980, there
were
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was
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a significant change that occurred in houses area
as well as
farmland. For houses blocks, they converted to science
block
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blocks
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and car
park
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parks
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as new facilities introduced in 1980.
Moreover
, farmland turned to be
sport
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sports
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field that
also
add privilege to the
school
. By 2010, There was
a
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apply
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considerable growth in
size
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the size
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of the car park.
However
, The
sport
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sports
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field shrink to
quarter
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a quarter
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of its original
size
in 1980. There was a slight change as well in the
size
of the playground
while
the main building remain steady in front of the main road.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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  • initially
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  • transformation
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • relocation
  • layout
  • adjacent
  • modification
  • demolished
  • constructed
  • facilities
  • infrastructure
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