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You are looking for a part time job. Write a letter to a employment agency. IN your letter : -introduce your self -explain what sort of job you would like -say what experience and skill you have

#part #time #job #employment #agency #-introduce #self #-explain #sort #-say #skill
Dear Sir,
Madarm
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Madam
 I am writing
this
 letter to apply
a
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job that you are recently hiring.
Firstly
, I would like to introduce myself that I have experience
regarding to
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this
 job. I am 'Phanomporn Thongon" you can call me shortly "pair"
that
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 is my nickname. I
work
 in the kitchen
almost
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 4 years and I have several
way
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ways
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 or
skill
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skills
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.
therefore
, I always practice myself to learn a new
thing
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things
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. I love to
work
 in the kitchen, I can
work
 in a pressure situation workplace and always keep
practicing
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. I am very
surely
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 that I will be a good chef. I am able to make
many
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any
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kind
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 of
the
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food,
Such
 as thai,
frence
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fence
France
furnace
,
Itarian
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Italian
 food
and
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apply
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etc.. because I have
work
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worked
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 with many
place
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places
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that
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where
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 I could have many different
skill
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skills
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.
In
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the
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one of the suitable potential that you can consider
this
 present is I confident I would be a good staff and I have some
evident
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evidence
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 which is more useful to confirm my experience is I have
a
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an
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 outstanding staff
cetificate
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certificate
. All above as I said that you can trust me. Thank you in advance, If your best considering I am looking forward to
see
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 you soon. sincerely your Pair
Submitted by pairpph on

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