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Nowadays, in many countries women have full time jobs. Therefore, it is logical to share household tasks evenly between men and women. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In the
last
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 decades, there has been a surge in the number of
women
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 working full-
time
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.
This
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 means that today, most of them do not have enough
time
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 to accomplish all of the
household
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 tasks. For
this
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 reason, it is debated whether men should equally contribute to these duties. Personally, I feel that if husbands did not spend some of their free
time
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 doing
household
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 chores or raising their children, wives would probably be far more unhappy and considerably stressed.
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 of all, if men did not contribute to accomplishing
household
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 tasks, some
women
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 would quit working.
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, certain families where both mothers and fathers
work
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 cannot afford to pay a woman for cleaning or cooking.
This
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 would not allow mothers to have enough
time
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 to
work
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 in order to complete housework.
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, many of them would want to continue working as they have their professional ambitions. By leaving their jobs, these
women
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 would be much more unhappy.
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, if men did not care about houses,
women
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 would end up without spare
time
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.
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, in families where mothers
work
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 as much as fathers, the former would spend all their free
time
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 raising children and doing
household
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work
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.
This
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 would not enable them to find enough
time
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 to rest and devote themselves to sports or their hobbies.
On the other hand
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, leisure
time
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 is necessary for all people to reduce stress and unwind.
Consequently
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, these
women
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 would risk being more stressed. In conclusion, today, more and more females
work
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 as much as males, and it is paramount to have an equal division of housework to provide
women
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 with the opportunity to achieve their
work
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 ambitions and the chance to unwind.
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