Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitats at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people's recreation. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.

In the recent era, replacing the
sea
creature from
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their
thir
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their
habitats
to
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the aquarium
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aquarium
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is easily doable with the great enhancement in
the
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transportation and technology.
However
, the question still remains open whether
this
relocation is beneficial for
people
's recreation or not. In
this
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we will discuss both points, and I think it's
disadvantegous
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disadvantageous
disadvantages
to move the animals from their natural habitats. There are several
benefit
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benefits
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to
relocate
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relocating
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the
sea
creatures to the amusement park.
First
, It will
be help
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to attract more tourism and local business can be benefitted from
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this
their
theis
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tourism.
Secondly
, it
provide
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the
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great source
for
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information educating the
people
and especially
to
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the students about the various
sea
species, their life and survival, and most importantly how we can save
this
animal from extinction. For e.g, Dubai host one of the largest
aquarium
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aquaria
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in the world, bring
the
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different
sea
animal from around the
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globe
globel
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globe
to attract
the
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tourist and as well as they provide
the
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lecture
for
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each different breed they carry for
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people
to understand what particular
sea
mammal eats to survive.
However
,
this
advantage
also
comes with
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the drawback
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drawback
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drawbacks
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to
the
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nature.
Main
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disadvantage of relocating the
sea
creature is that it will impact their breeding process because most
of
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the
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fish need
certain
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and stable
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temperature
temprature
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temperature
to breed. Furthermost,
space
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provided in the amusement part is quite small that too shared with other creatures and noises from the tourist that can create
uncomfortable
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an uncomfortable
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environment for them. For e.g, emperor
pengiun
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penguin
for breeding
require
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very
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low temperature and
stable
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ice platform
for
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breeding. They cannot survive long in the man-made created snow house,
hence
in the
last
2
years
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Hong Kong has seen
the
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decline in the number of
pengiun
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penguin
penguins
in their WorldOcean park. With
this
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government
Governement
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Government
has decided not to move the
pengiun
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penguin
from their north pole
habitate
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habitat
to
artificial
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snow room. We are not denying that having
creature
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creatures
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in the amusement park is beneficial for the
people
to learn and promote
the
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tourism.
However
, with the aforementioned points, one will agree that it's
disadvantegous
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disadvantageous
disadvantages
to relocate any
sea
species from
natural
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its natural
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habitat as they cannot survive long with
change
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in the surrounding atmosphere and noise.
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