Nowadays, it is possible to move ocean creatures from their natural habitats at sea and have them relocated in amusement parks for the purpose of people's recreation. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages? Explain your reasons and support them with specific examples.
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In the recent era, replacing the
sea
creature from Correct your spelling
their
thir
habitats Correct your spelling
their
to
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with
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the aquarium
an aquarium
aquarium
is easily doable with the great enhancement in Fix the agreement mistake
aquariums
the
transportation and technology. Correct article usage
apply
However
, the question still remains open whether this
relocation is beneficial for people
's recreation or not. In this
essay
we will discuss both points, and I think it's Add a comma
,essay
disadvantegous
to move the animals from their natural habitats.
There are several Correct your spelling
disadvantageous
disadvantages
benefit
to Change to a plural noun
benefits
relocate
the Change the verb form
relocating
sea
creatures to the amusement park. First
, It will be help
to attract more tourism and local business can be benefitted from Change the verb form
help
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this
their
theis
tourism. Correct your spelling
this
Secondly
, it provide
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provides
the
great source Correct article usage
a
for
information educating the Change preposition
of
people
and especially to
the students about the various Change preposition
apply
sea
species, their life and survival, and most importantly how we can save this
animal from extinction. For e.g, Dubai host one of the largest aquarium
in the world, bring Change to a plural noun
aquaria
the
different Correct article usage
apply
sea
animal from around the Correct your spelling
globe
globel
to attract Correct your spelling
globe
the
tourist and as well as they provide Correct article usage
apply
the
lecture Correct article usage
apply
for
each different breed they carry for Change preposition
on
the
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apply
people
to understand what particular sea
mammal eats to survive. However
, this
advantage also
comes with Add an article
the drawback
drawback
to Fix the agreement mistake
drawbacks
the
nature.
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apply
Main
disadvantage of relocating the Add an article
The main
sea
creature is that it will impact their breeding process because most of
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apply
the
fish need Correct article usage
apply
certain
and stable Correct article usage
a certain
Correct your spelling
temperature
temprature
to breed. Furthermost, Correct your spelling
temperature
space
provided in the amusement part is quite small that too shared with other creatures and noises from the tourist that can create Correct article usage
the space
uncomfortable
environment for them. For e.g, emperor Add an article
an uncomfortable
pengiun
for breeding Correct your spelling
penguin
require
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requires
very
low temperature and Correct article usage
a very
stable
ice platform Correct article usage
a stable
for
breeding. They cannot survive long in the man-made created snow house, Change preposition
apply
hence
in the last
2 years
Hong Kong has seen Add a comma
,years
the
decline in the number of Correct article usage
a
pengiun
in their WorldOcean park. With Correct your spelling
penguin
penguins
this
Correct your spelling
government
Governement
has decided not to move the Correct your spelling
Government
pengiun
from their north pole Correct your spelling
penguin
habitate
to Correct your spelling
habitat
artificial
snow room.
We are not denying that having Correct article usage
an artificial
creature
in the amusement park is beneficial for the Fix the agreement mistake
creatures
people
to learn and promote the
tourism. Correct article usage
apply
However
, with the aforementioned points, one will agree that it's disadvantegous
to relocate any Correct your spelling
disadvantageous
disadvantages
sea
species from natural
habitat as they cannot survive long with Correct pronoun usage
its natural
change
in the surrounding atmosphere and noise.Fix the agreement mistake
changes
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