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alternative energy source that use natural power of wind, waves and sun are too expensive and complicated to replace the coal oil and the gas that we use to power our cities and transport

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It is frequently believed that the
production
 of green
energy
such
 as solar
power
 wind
power
 and wave
power
 is unaffordable and complex. While the traditional
energy
sources
 like oil,
gas
 and coal are cheaper for city and transportation purposes. I disagree with
this
 belief. In
this
 essay, I will explain that green
energy
 is more productive and harmless to the earth. Coal and
gas
 are largely used in various industries and
power
 generation plants, while
gas
 is for domestic purposes. According to a survey, these traditional
energy
sources
 cause 70% of the total pollution in the world. Climate change is a huge problem, which is not limited to a group of regions or countries. It affects each and every part of the globe. Researchers had proved that excessive usage of natural
energy
sources
 namely oil,
gas
, and coal results in global warming.
This
 picture can be changed by replacing them with green
energy
. The
production
 cost of alternative
energy
 is an issue. To protect mother nature is more important than the economics of the country. As the technology is getting advanced every day the expenses of alternate
energy
 can be reduced.
For example
, 20 years ago buying a phone or television set was not budget-friendly for everyone, but now it is common to have a smartphone and a flat-screen television in each home. Rather than funding the unnecessary space program, if the government will spend money on safer
energy
production
, it will help the reduction of pollution.
Instead
 of saving
money
Add a comma
,money
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 we all should concentrate on saving natural wealth so that our
next
 generations can experience the real beauty of nature. In conclusion, by developing better equipment for green
energy
production
 we can replace the traditional
energy
sources
 for vehicles and cities at a better cost.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • fossil fuels
  • initial investment
  • cost-effective
  • technological advancements
  • energy efficiency
  • environmental sustainability
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • long-term benefits
  • energy transition
  • energy security
  • socioeconomic benefits
  • geopolitical
  • market fluctuations
  • energy diversification
  • carbon footprint
  • harnessing natural power
  • solar panels
  • wind turbines
  • wave energy
  • adoption barriers
  • sustainable future
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