It is sometimes said that people should be encouraged to get married before they are 30, as this is best both for the individual and for society. Do you agree or disagree?
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. I too think that there are Use synonyms
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society
.
In the past especially in countries like India, child marriages are common because at that period country's literacy rate was low and the Use synonyms
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children
children's
childrens
were working at a very young age to support Correct your spelling
children
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their
thier
families for basic income. The government has taken various steps to Correct your spelling
their
erradicate
child marriages and it is a rare Correct your spelling
eradicate
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occurrence
occurence
in the country. Correct your spelling
occurrence
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, now the scenario is different, people are well educated and they know the Linking Words
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family
familiy
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family
life
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in
an early age, but they still prefer not to get married sooner because most of the young agers Change preposition
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belief
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burden
on them and it will stop them from achieving their Add an article
a burden
life
goals.
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life
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until
countries
it is a usual sight of seeing fathers and mothers are much older nearing their 60s when their boy or girl is still in their teenage. Add a comma
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marriage
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becomes
responsible when they get married, but it does not mean there are Change the verb form
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lot
of changes in their action Change the article
a lot
towards
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toward
society
.
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children
childrens
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children
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