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Some people think that activities during the free-time should be planned while others disagree. Discuss both sides and include examples and relevant data from your own experience.

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modern
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 era
time
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 is very precious.it would never come again.many individuals believe that action during their free while should be planned whereas remaining opposed to
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.I will discuss both the views in upcoming paragraphs According to the former ,statement there are ample reasons that support my back.It helps to save the present.
i
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 mean to say that at present climate masses have to extra
time
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 for planning any life.so in the free
time
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 they can't waste their point and they should make planing for new action.
for example
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young generation They have no.
time
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 for their
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activities
activity
activitie
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activity
 so it helps to encourage
for
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them for
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 doing
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 activity.
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,they
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manage
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menage
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manage
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 their
time
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 easily and get success easily in
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apply
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life. Apparently,some folks disagree with
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 idea.The primary reason is they lose their thinking ability.To explain it,some folks are mentally disturbed.so they are already tired
for
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 doing their job as well as they want some free
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 to get rest.And they think if folks think about enterprise and make planing for other activities so ,
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 they lose their power of thinking.
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is
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does not advantage
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not
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no
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 advantage for
young
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the young
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 generation and it
produce
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wrong
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the wrong
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 effect on them. To conclude,both
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views are equal.there has no difference between them. But I stand with the former statement because
turn
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 is the key to success.so don't
wasted
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 the turn.
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