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More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to acess information. So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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In the contemporary world, advancement in technology has changed the way
people
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 acquire information. An
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ever increasing
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 number of individuals are utilizing electronic
devices
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such
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 as
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tablets
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, computers,
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and laptops
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. Several I opine that there is no need to print traditional ne s hard copies of books and magazines. I firmly believe that
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 statement does not hold much ground.
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 material.
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 and Foremost, There are
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 of
people
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 that are not
computer
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 literate.They are not capable of handling these gizmos. To be more specific, a person needs a
well
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 knowledge
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of operating
ofoperating
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of operating
gadgetsand
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gadgets and
 avast study of technology.
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, according to
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 research,in 2020, there are only 34% males and 30% females
computer
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literates
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 which is very low as
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the majority
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 of the population is
illerate
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illiterate
.
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,
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 is a big segment of society which is extremely poor. They can't even think of purchasing these electronic
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.
Computer
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 education is beyond their reach. To exemplify, according to
world
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 poverty clock in 2021, roughly 86-6 million of the population are living in poverty.
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, There are
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 of
people
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 living in remote
areas
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 which
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 not any link with the rest of the world
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, There is no electricity in
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 remote
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. The utilization of electronic
devices
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 is far away from their thinking.
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,
people
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 living in
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himalayan
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the himalayan
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 region and most
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 of
african
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African
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country
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countries
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 are living in
thelives
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the lives
 with no
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access
acess
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access
 to electricity.so it is very hard to get in touch with other
areas
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.
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 to
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, their government can't even provide a single
computer
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 to their schools.
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, purchasing gadgets for themselves is
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 to impossible for them.
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, Newspapers,
books
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 carry
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an Aesthetic
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 sense with them.
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 gives a unique pleasure to the reader which we can't get from
a
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 e-book,
e- newspapers
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e-newspapers
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 and online editorials and blogs...
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, many
people
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 in
india
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India
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 like to read along with a cup of tea or coffee...
secondly
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,
blue
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 screen of these
devices
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 may adversely
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affect
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effect
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affect
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 the eye vision of the readers. Nowadays, children need spectacles in their early childhood.
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 situation is a result of
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computer's
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 bluescreen. which in long run could ruin their eye vision which we know is irreversible.
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 but not the least, the other major reason is distractions. To be more specific, To access
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the
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educational materials
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 internet access. Social media access
also
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 comes along with connection. There
are
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stimulantous
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stimulants
notification
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notifications
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 while reading informational stuff. These notifications may easily distract the students. To sum up, After
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 it is quite evident that stopping publishing the books, newspapers &magass tIs not a feasible idea.was it will deprive many
people
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from
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 studying
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